haiku and not-haiku from Mark Holloway @forgottenworks
All poetry in those two words "autumn mist" ... All poetry in "not knowing how to talk" ... Live beauty.
P.S: would you consider eliminating "about"? just a suggestion (me again)
Hi Anonymous, thanks for coming back. Interesting suggestion, I'll have to think about the implications of that. If I did, I think I'd also have to change the lines around ... not knowinghow to talk poetryautumn mistAnd my immediate thought is, actually that might well be better!
Although ... autumn mistnot knowing how to talkpoetry... aaarggh, each version reveals different nuances!
All gorgeous ... Yet my personal taste goes for the last one. Poetry is daring while not knowing. Full appreciation for our interaction that shines warmth.Cheers to poetry!
Think I'm just going to let this one settle for a little while. Cheers, Anonymous!
to anyone reading this exchange for the first time, it will make no sense at all. but that's just me, i do tend to keep meddling - i mean revising - honing! let's call it honing!
honing by stamina :) ... poem's journey, reader's privilege(P.S to reader: Mark initial posting "autumn mist / not knowing how to talk/ about poetry")