2 August 2009


a pale blue breeze
last night's rain falls
from this morning's trees


4 comments:

  1. I wonder if just the second line would suffice. It seems very complete in itself?

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  2. I also like the "pale blue breeze" - for me it evokes an image of a clear day ahead.

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  3. yes, the illusion of rain falling from a blue sky.
    (also, i did worry about breeze and trees because i so rarely rhyme, but it seemed to work on this occasion.)

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