haiku and not-haiku from Mark Holloway @forgottenworks
:0)Been there! Add a skunk wandering into the tent and it describes my favorite camping story.nice precise, elegant, smiley way to start my Monday! Thanks.
Thank you, Karen.(By the way, I have expanded this one into haiku form since Karen left her comment. At that time it was a single line -each tent flapping its own snorePreferences?)
Hi Mark,I like this particular piece both ways. Sometimes you NEED the haiku form for the beauty of it, but this works as a simple line as well without the addition of small hours.I almost always "construct" my words. I have something up now. You can see what I mean if you stop in.I still don't call the words I string together poems. [grins] I call them "sensual sentences" even though a couple have been published on a poetry site.Lovely piece. It brought back fun summer memories.Karen :0)
My 2 cents - I like the full three lines here. It unfolds nicely, and I laughed at the end. Excellent.-Kyle
I think the three lines work well, the first brings our focus in close, then the shift from the second to the third gives us a pleasant surprise.